Comments on: 437: Three, Fore

By: AlexandraErin

AlexandraErin — Sat, 27 Mar 2010 02:44:55 +0000

At the point at which that was asked, that part wasn't in the story... I wrote this while I had massive amounts of untreated tooth pain and so when it first went up there were a load of errors like that, many of which I caught before they were commented on.

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By: David

David — Fri, 26 Mar 2010 05:37:34 +0000

@ What happened to Mack's clothing?: Amaranth whisked them away to her little hidey-hole pocket dimension thingy. Mack described it as feeling a twinge of the memory of when that teleportation spell robbed her of her clothes and her knife. P.S. After that anagram comment, I'm gonna be using a lot more 'subtext'... or just having obscene amounts of raunchy buttsex, I haven't decided yet

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By: Duke Nidalap

Duke Nidalap — Fri, 26 Mar 2010 03:25:35 +0000

Just posting this correction since no one else seems to have done so. Sorry if it's a double. - “You wanted a dedicated sign to hide on the door,” I said. I'm guessing you meant "hang on the door". Best Wishes.

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By: That Dave Guy

That Dave Guy — Fri, 26 Mar 2010 00:02:50 +0000

Um, I should clarify that #3 above does not mean I disapprove of talking during sex, just that MU characters tend to bring up the unsexiest topics at the most inopportune times.

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By: That Dave Guy

That Dave Guy — Fri, 26 Mar 2010 00:01:30 +0000

1) Sexually aggressive Mack = hawtsome. 2) I would sell my soul to be able to bite a lover with full strength without harming them. (I'd have to obtain a soul first, but that's beside the point). 3) People who start conversations in the middle of foreplay should be slapped. Whether in the fun way or not is up to the slapper. (Although I get what you're going for here re: objectification). 4) I'm 99% certain I'm not attracted to guys, but for some reason the cock + boobs combination does not squick me nearly as much as I'd expect. At least not fictionally... all the real-life instances I've seen have been meh. Probably because there are few (insert whatever term professional "shemales" prefer to be called here) who embody the fusion of masculine and feminine the way a halfkind does.

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By: adric

adric — Thu, 25 Mar 2010 01:51:14 +0000

Oh, the new teaser format from these last two is just great! Thanks much foe such entertaining writing! Cheers, adric

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By: szlembarski

szlembarski — Wed, 24 Mar 2010 21:24:42 +0000

BUTT SEX BUTT SEX, then the epic you were talking about.

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By: Zathras IX

Zathras IX — Wed, 24 Mar 2010 02:56:53 +0000

Amaranth, Steff and Mackenzie tie one on with Two kinds of doorknob

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By: AlexandraErin

AlexandraErin — Wed, 24 Mar 2010 02:40:47 +0000

Oh, whoops. Amaranth was supposed to have removed her clothing in the process of positioning her. I'll fix that. I was (and am) in fairly intense pain as I wrote this.

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By: Lunaroki

Lunaroki — Wed, 24 Mar 2010 01:51:36 +0000

By the end of this chapter I get the general impression that Mack has somehow gotten naked but I can't for the life of me recall anywhere in that chapter where it is stated that any of Mack's clothes have come off.

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