Comments on: 448: Playing With Fire

By: Ducky

Ducky — Thu, 01 Jul 2010 06:53:20 +0000

She wouldn't have picked up the phone and taken it, but she could have gone down and said, "Mack, your mirror has been buzzing for the last *insert time here*. I think it's Lee."

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By: Arakano

Arakano — Tue, 29 Jun 2010 15:52:01 +0000

The Magesterian War (sp?) roughly equals the American War of Independence. Merovia would roughly equal France, btw, I suppose, but in this world it does not seem like it got involved as much in the fighting [Merovingans were an early medieval dynasty of France].

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By: Erianaiel

Erianaiel — Tue, 29 Jun 2010 14:59:19 +0000

Not to mention that he gave her that mirror for the express purpose so she could talk to him (and had it fixed so that nobody else could contact her without first going through his office). He probably realised three seconds into their first interview that letting Mackenzie speak with anybody was a legal disaster waiting to happen. Of course either Mackenzie's demonic possession or her father had fried the Wall of Fire and its protection, leaving her open to being hounded by journalists and I am not entirely certain if the new mirror she got had the same restrictions placed on it. Still, unless something happened off camera that put Mackenzie back in the zoomlenses of the paperazzi, the list of people being able to contact Mackenzie through that particular mirror is rather short and Lee is at the top of the list.

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By: Erianaiel

Erianaiel — Tue, 29 Jun 2010 14:51:23 +0000

I think Two could do no such thing without first being told in no uncertain terms that it is ok to do so. Right now it is Mackenzie's mirror so Two can not answer it, and it is Mackenzie's mirror so Two can not pick it up, as it is not hers.

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By: tjhairball

tjhairball — Tue, 29 Jun 2010 12:33:47 +0000

Do you really have to ask who's been calling Mack? I will not be the only person surprised if Lee hasn't called her. She left him a message in #447, and he is, if I'm not greatly mistaken, also the person she talks with by mirror most often. He may not be the only person that has called, of course...

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By: Seeker of Spicy Food

Seeker of Spicy Food — Tue, 29 Jun 2010 07:05:51 +0000

Heh, go Mack and her interest in fighting! Or, not, since now people will think she's MORE dangerous...Geh. Something tells me that there's going to be some pain for Mack involving her staff and Gloria soon...! And I'm not sure I want to know - well, I lied, I totally do - about who's been calling Mack?

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By: LlubNek

LlubNek — Mon, 28 Jun 2010 22:14:29 +0000

“They were the things that the enchanted staff had been doing pretty much on its own, and they weren’t that hard to figure out if you just held a staff out in front of in the half grip while someone swung something at you. ”

missing a “you” I think

“They were the things that the enchanted staff had been doing pretty much on its own, and they weren’t that hard to figure out if you just held a staff out in front of you in the half grip while someone swung something at you. ”

“Maybe I was half-assing things a bit again by putting the staff down after maybe fifteen or twenty minutes of hefting it and moving it around, but I didn’t think I was going to become a master stickfighter in room by myself.”

missing an “a”

“Bohd might have been impressed with what I was doing, but it didn’t fulfill the assignment and that aside, the real purpose of the elemental projection assignment, my renewed… or just plain newed… interest in melee fighting… and my experiments in combining the two was to defend myself, not have something cool to show off in class.”

missing a comma

“Bohd might have been impressed with what I was doing, but it didn’t fulfill the assignment, and that aside, the real purpose of the elemental projection assignment, my renewed… or just plain newed… interest in melee fighting… and my experiments in combining the two was to defend myself, not have something cool to show off in class.”

also, odd phrasing. Maybe this instead:

“Bohd might have been impressed with what I was doing, but it didn’t fulfill the assignment, and aside from that, my renewed… or just plain newed… interest in melee fighting and my experiments in combining the two were to defend myself, not have something cool to show off in class.”

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By: steve

steve — Mon, 28 Jun 2010 14:46:08 +0000

Nice work, as always. A possible thought for the staff, if Mack had it magically break in half, and then the two halves magnet-like stick together, it becomes much more portable without having to lose its physical properties of length or weight. (Or if she upgrades to a longer staff, have it split in 3)

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By: Marx

Marx — Mon, 28 Jun 2010 09:07:25 +0000

Ok,... Two should've actually taken the cellphone down to Mack as soon as she noticed the persistence of the caller. Anyways, very cool chapter, with all the "Twirly flame jets of doom" or whatev.

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By: bramble

bramble — Mon, 28 Jun 2010 06:44:30 +0000

from what I understood of Mack Daddy's promise, it was that she was earning opportunities to tell him to leave her alone. He's willing to give her twenty-four hours without his interference for each time she knocks someone on their ass, but she has to ask for it first. Actually, come to think of it, he may even be depending on her NOT using her "daddy-free day" credits. If Mack's smart, she'll think carefully about when she tells him to shove off. If she just thinks she's smart, she'll decide to save them when she really should be spending them, because what if she needs them later?

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